Angelish redone
Submitted January 19, 2007 Updated September 3, 2007 Status Incomplete | Angelish with more detail! ^^ I reposted chapter one with even more detail and chapter two is up as well! :)
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Chapters
Chapter 1 - one
Submitted: January 19, 2007 • Updated: September 2, 2007
Word count: 3240 • Size: 17k • Comments: 2 • views: 292
Chapter 2 - Chapter two
Submitted: March 19, 2007 • Updated: March 19, 2007
Word count: 1246 • Size: 6k • Comments: 1 • views: 237
Chapter 3 - chapter 3
Submitted: April 16, 2007 • Updated: April 16, 2007
Word count: 909 • Size: 4k • Comments: 1 • views: 215
Chapter 4 - Chapter 4
Submitted: April 16, 2007 • Updated: September 2, 2007
Word count: 2007 • Size: 10k • Comments: 0 • views: 228
Chapter 5 - chapter 5
Submitted: April 17, 2007 • Updated: April 17, 2007
Word count: 643 • Size: 3k • Comments: 1 • views: 215
Chapter 6 - chapter 6
Submitted: April 17, 2007 • Updated: April 17, 2007
Word count: 903 • Size: 4k • Comments: 1 • views: 214
Chapter 7 - chapter 7
Submitted: April 17, 2007 • Updated: April 17, 2007
Word count: 1114 • Size: 6k • Comments: 1 • views: 256
Chapter 8 - chapter 8
Submitted: April 17, 2007 • Updated: April 17, 2007
Word count: 1879 • Size: 9k • Comments: 1 • views: 254
Chapter 9 - chapter 9
Submitted: April 17, 2007 • Updated: September 3, 2007
Word count: 2370 • Size: 12k • Comments: 1 • views: 248
Chapter 10 - another chapter
Submitted: May 15, 2007 • Updated: May 15, 2007
Word count: 925 • Size: 4k • Comments: 3 • views: 234
Chapter 11 - chapter 11
Submitted: June 18, 2007 • Updated: June 18, 2007
Word count: 819 • Size: 4k • Comments: 5 • views: 244
Chapter 12 - Chapter 12
Submitted: August 7, 2007 • Updated: September 3, 2007
Word count: 715 • Size: 3k • Comments: 4 • views: 221
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orliej16 on August 26, 2007, 1:44:29 AM
summerstorm on August 10, 2007, 2:22:31 AM
Yeah, this chapter is really good at creating atmosphere. The dream/vision thing she had was very creepy and evocative...it reminded me of the Voldy scenes too! How much are they going to make poor Buzz do before she snaps? Or will she snap...?
Oh, randomly...I liked the detail about Allison not liking being yelled at. I totally identify with that. (I'm a poet like the guy in the middle throne!)
Good chapter! Yay! Update again soon!
dancing_thru_life on August 8, 2007, 11:04:41 AM
Dun Dun Dun! The creepy dreamlike setting reminds me a bit of the Voldy scenes in Harry Potter. (That's not a bad thing, don't worry.) You did use the word 'figure' a few too many times, as you said on your profile, but it's not necessarily a big deal.
I'm trying to remember if Emily was a character earlier in the story... I vaguely remember a girl with that name...
I will probably go over the last few chapters some time soon, just to see if she appears in any of them.
(Obviously, I have terrible memory for that kind of thing.)
I like this chapter. Even though it is short, it presents an accurately creepy atmosphere, and the detail is more apparent than it was in previous chapters. YAY JOA!
_theater_freak_147 on August 8, 2007, 2:09:46 PM
Yay! Thanks for the comment Dan! Oh hey I just relized that the guy in the middle throne rhymes in the last thing he says. Haha...summerstorm on June 20, 2007, 12:30:40 AM
I like it despite its shortness, though. Your characters are becoming more and more believable as the story goes on! And as they become more believable, I'm realizing more and more...you're right, Allison is so totally you! You probably would've said a speech exactly like that in her position, wouldn't you've? lol
dancing_thru_life on August 8, 2007, 11:08:05 AM
Oh Jebus Ellen, everyone knows that 'Allison' is, was, and always will be Joa-chan. I wonder if any of my characters are like me... (I don't think they are... but...)summerstorm on July 23, 2007, 4:04:13 AM
Hey, Jo...WHEN ARE YOU GOING TO POST ANOTHER CHAPTER???
I'm waiting....lol :) Please update soon!
orliej16 on July 10, 2007, 5:16:00 AM
ooooooh...making a speech..!!! I know how Allison feels in this sort of situations!!
I hate speeches!!
But I think she did pretty wel actually XD
orliej16 on July 10, 2007, 5:11:31 AM
wow...I got confused when I read about the corpdivision thingies XDBut stil..Great chapter! XD
orliej16 on July 10, 2007, 5:05:35 AM
Chapter 10, chapter 10, chapter 10, chapter 10!!!!!!!!orliej16 on June 26, 2007, 11:04:58 PM
wow!!Youve definetley put more detail in the story!! I really like it!! ^0^
Please, keep writing!! ^^
dancing_thru_life on June 18, 2007, 6:41:43 AM
Heh. I have the habit of saying 'uh' and 'um' too much also!Nice chapter. ^_^
Well done!! ^0^