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Angelish redone

Angelish with more detail! ^^ I reposted chapter one with even more detail and chapter two is up as well! :)

Chapters

Chapters

Chapter 1 - one
Submitted: January 19, 2007 • Updated: September 2, 2007
Word count: 3240 • Size: 17k • Comments: 2 • views: 341

Chapter 2 - Chapter two
Submitted: March 19, 2007 • Updated: March 19, 2007
Word count: 1246 • Size: 6k • Comments: 1 • views: 256

Chapter 3 - chapter 3
Submitted: April 16, 2007 • Updated: April 16, 2007
Word count: 909 • Size: 4k • Comments: 1 • views: 233

Chapter 4 - Chapter 4
Submitted: April 16, 2007 • Updated: September 2, 2007
Word count: 2007 • Size: 10k • Comments: 0 • views: 277

Chapter 5 - chapter 5
Submitted: April 17, 2007 • Updated: April 17, 2007
Word count: 643 • Size: 3k • Comments: 1 • views: 263

Chapter 6 - chapter 6
Submitted: April 17, 2007 • Updated: April 17, 2007
Word count: 903 • Size: 4k • Comments: 1 • views: 237

Chapter 7 - chapter 7
Submitted: April 17, 2007 • Updated: April 17, 2007
Word count: 1114 • Size: 6k • Comments: 1 • views: 304

Chapter 8 - chapter 8
Submitted: April 17, 2007 • Updated: April 17, 2007
Word count: 1879 • Size: 9k • Comments: 1 • views: 303

Chapter 9 - chapter 9
Submitted: April 17, 2007 • Updated: September 3, 2007
Word count: 2370 • Size: 12k • Comments: 1 • views: 300

Chapter 10 - another chapter
Submitted: May 15, 2007 • Updated: May 15, 2007
Word count: 925 • Size: 4k • Comments: 3 • views: 282

Chapter 11 - chapter 11
Submitted: June 18, 2007 • Updated: June 18, 2007
Word count: 819 • Size: 4k • Comments: 5 • views: 291

Chapter 12 - Chapter 12
Submitted: August 7, 2007 • Updated: September 3, 2007
Word count: 715 • Size: 3k • Comments: 4 • views: 237

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orliej16 on August 26, 2007, 1:44:29 AM

orliej16 on (Chapter: 12)
orliej16wow! this is spooky and exciting at the same time!! this really is an important chapter!! Cant wait for the next!!
Well done!! ^0^

summerstorm on August 10, 2007, 2:22:31 AM

summerstorm on (Chapter: 12)
summerstormYeah, this chapter is really good at creating atmosphere. The dream/vision thing she had was very creepy and evocative...it reminded me of the Voldy scenes too!

How much are they going to make poor Buzz do before she snaps? Or will she snap...?

Oh, randomly...I liked the detail about Allison not liking being yelled at. I totally identify with that. (I'm a poet like the guy in the middle throne!)

Good chapter! Yay! Update again soon!

dancing_thru_life on August 8, 2007, 11:04:41 AM

dancing_thru_life on (Chapter: 12)
dancing_thru_lifeDun Dun Dun! The creepy dreamlike setting reminds me a bit of the Voldy scenes in Harry Potter.
(That's not a bad thing, don't worry.) You did use the word 'figure' a few too many times, as you said on your profile, but it's not necessarily a big deal.
I'm trying to remember if Emily was a character earlier in the story... I vaguely remember a girl with that name...
I will probably go over the last few chapters some time soon, just to see if she appears in any of them.
(Obviously, I have terrible memory for that kind of thing.)
I like this chapter. Even though it is short, it presents an accurately creepy atmosphere, and the detail is more apparent than it was in previous chapters. YAY JOA!

_theater_freak_147 on August 8, 2007, 2:09:46 PM

_theater_freak_147 on (Chapter: 12)
_theater_freak_147Yay! Thanks for the comment Dan! Oh hey I just relized that the guy in the middle throne rhymes in the last thing he says. Haha...

summerstorm on June 20, 2007, 12:30:40 AM

summerstorm on (Chapter: 11)
summerstormI like it despite its shortness, though. Your characters are becoming more and more believable as the story goes on!

And as they become more believable, I'm realizing more and more...you're right, Allison is so totally you! You probably would've said a speech exactly like that in her position, wouldn't you've? lol

dancing_thru_life on August 8, 2007, 11:08:05 AM

dancing_thru_life on (Chapter: 11)
dancing_thru_lifeOh Jebus Ellen, everyone knows that 'Allison' is, was, and always will be Joa-chan. I wonder if any of my characters are like me... (I don't think they are... but...)

summerstorm on July 23, 2007, 4:04:13 AM

summerstorm on (Chapter: index)
summerstormHey, Jo...
WHEN ARE YOU GOING TO POST ANOTHER CHAPTER???
I'm waiting....lol :) Please update soon!

orliej16 on July 10, 2007, 5:16:00 AM

orliej16 on (Chapter: 11)
orliej16ooooooh...making a speech..!!!
I know how Allison feels in this sort of situations!!
I hate speeches!!
But I think she did pretty wel actually XD

orliej16 on July 10, 2007, 5:11:31 AM

orliej16 on (Chapter: 10)
orliej16wow...I got confused when I read about the corpdivision thingies XD
But stil..Great chapter! XD

orliej16 on July 10, 2007, 5:05:35 AM

orliej16 on (Chapter: 9)
orliej16Chapter 10, chapter 10, chapter 10, chapter 10!!!!!!!!

orliej16 on June 26, 2007, 11:04:58 PM

orliej16 on (Chapter: 8)
orliej16wow!!
Youve definetley put more detail in the story!! I really like it!! ^0^
Please, keep writing!! ^^

dancing_thru_life on June 18, 2007, 6:41:43 AM

dancing_thru_life on (Chapter: 11)
dancing_thru_lifeHeh. I have the habit of saying 'uh' and 'um' too much also!
Nice chapter. ^_^