Silent Screaming

A very intriguing beginning! ^^

I dont't know what I would rate it :S but, I liked the good use of vocabulary, description of events and the characters' sense of realism. It uses the form of a narrative and you skillfully utulise those aspects to engage the audience through curiosity and mystery. Not a big thing, but some sentences seem too long and I think the dialogue could be separated to make reading easier... maybe? However the chosen words and techniques involved produce an entertaining read. ^^

Keep writing! : D