Clearer
Submitted August 27, 2005 Updated August 27, 2005 Status Incomplete | is just a poem about what i thought life was
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Chapter 1 - Clearer
Submitted: August 27, 2005 • Updated: August 27, 2005
Word count: 116 • Size: <1k • Comments: 3 • views: 141
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kos on September 24, 2005, 2:25:17 PM
kos on (Chapter: 1)
kos on September 24, 2005, 2:20:49 PM
kos on (Chapter: 1)
This is a good poem, at least I think so, because it shares a bit of the author's soul with the world. And that's generally a good thing. Keep up the good work.kiaragurl03 on August 29, 2005, 5:56:18 AM
kiaragurl03 on (Chapter: 1)
What do you mean you didn't think it was good!??! You told me at soccer practice that it was bad! You kidding!? Its amazing! I wish I could write something that good ,but all lately on my mind lately is poems that seem to have the same beginning. I also find myself to write about things like about a flower! OMG! I'M GONNA GO WRITE THAT! *runs off*Yusuke: Wtf!?
Haru: Insane werido
Hiro: Freaking werido *goes off to this explanination*
Kyo: What am I doing here?
Me: Oh yeah! *runs back and grabs them* They are mines!* See ya tomrrow!
- The formatting is messed up, at least on my screen. It's all just one paragraph. I'd love to see this poem arranged into stanzas, because a lot of poetry is enhanced by the way it is laid out on the page, which affects the way that it is read and understood.
- "wounds will heel" -> "wounds will heal"
- "god" is normally capitalized, though I realize you may have left it uncapitalized deliberately.
- "I know are true" -> "I know is true"