Arianne??
Submitted April 19, 2009 Updated June 28, 2009 Status Incomplete | First, she finds that her guardians arent human. Then she finds that she isnt human. then she finds that the boy she likes/hates isnt human. Then she finds that her biological father wants her for her powers. Then he kidnaps them all.
Category:
Fantasy |
Chapters
Chapter 0 - Prologue
Submitted: April 19, 2009 • Updated: April 19, 2009
Word count: 1162 • Size: 6k • Comments: 6 • views: 352
Chapter 1 - Chapter One
Submitted: April 19, 2009 • Updated: April 19, 2009
Word count: 2277 • Size: 11k • Comments: 1 • views: 338
Chapter 2 - Chapter Two
Submitted: April 19, 2009 • Updated: April 19, 2009
Word count: 1179 • Size: 6k • Comments: 0 • views: 349
Chapter 3 - Chapter Three
Submitted: April 19, 2009 • Updated: April 19, 2009
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Chapter 4 - Chapter Four
Submitted: April 19, 2009 • Updated: April 19, 2009
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Chapter 5 - Chapter Five
Submitted: April 20, 2009 • Updated: April 20, 2009
Word count: 348 • Size: 1k • Comments: 0 • views: 347
Chapter 6 - Chapter Six
Submitted: April 20, 2009 • Updated: April 20, 2009
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Chapter 7 - Chapter Seven
Submitted: April 20, 2009 • Updated: April 20, 2009
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Chapter 8 - Chapter Eight
Submitted: April 20, 2009 • Updated: April 20, 2009
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Chapter 9 - Chapter Nine
Submitted: April 20, 2009 • Updated: April 20, 2009
Word count: 3662 • Size: 19k • Comments: 0 • views: 345
Chapter 10 - Chapter Ten
Submitted: May 2, 2009 • Updated: May 2, 2009
Word count: 1153 • Size: 5k • Comments: 0 • views: 335
Chapter 11 - Chapter Eleven
Submitted: June 3, 2009 • Updated: June 3, 2009
Word count: 2327 • Size: 12k • Comments: 0 • views: 330
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Kaley on August 30, 2009, 2:45:55 AM
liggybird on July 2, 2009, 8:18:32 PM
An exciting opening chapter to the story.The background on Luca's origins (and Arianne's feelings towards him) is interesting.
Nice touches of humour (eg the teddy remark and the occasional rolling of someone's eyes).
Not sure about your use of the word 'telly' (maybe it's too colloquial) nor whether you really need to explain why the word 'threatening' is in quotation marks (nine lines up).
The differences between Kieran and Jaxon are interesting (eg Jaxon feels unable to kill his adversary) and I'm wondering how Luca's character might evolve.
liggybird on June 28, 2009, 8:55:19 PM
Only read the prologue so far, but this is hilarious. The dry humour of the synopsis ('First she finds her guardians aren't human. etc.') attracted me and hinted that this might be the case.Talk about problematic childhoods. Poor Arianne(?). 'This is so like one of those twisted movie plots.' I second that.
xxnataxx on June 28, 2009, 10:49:44 PM
haha yea. actually, this is the first ever story i wrote...i've written quite a lot but i havent finished yet. xxKokoroTsuki24 on April 19, 2009, 6:04:32 PM
noooo! the horror! i finished. r u making more?xxnataxx on April 19, 2009, 7:02:28 PM
yep...actually, i've already made more...just need time to upload it...kinda busy with school and all...but i'll try (:xx
KokoroTsuki24 on April 19, 2009, 5:42:05 PM
ooh. ive only read the prologue and i luv it!
that's no way to end a story!
I WANT MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!