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My Sickness

Experimenting with combining poetry, dairy writing, and song lyrics (not my own!). A way of expressing mixed feelings in a different type of way.



Chapter 1 - 'Whispers in the Dark'
Submitted: July 19, 2008 • Updated: July 21, 2008
Word count: 1181 • Size: 6k • Comments: 4 • views: 283


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mangacheese1818 on July 20, 2008, 1:17:09 PM

mangacheese1818 on (Chapter: index)
mangacheese1818I really like it :)

Just one thing. Could you italicize the original lyrics so people who don't know the song (like me) can tell who wrote what?

zeldafan92 on July 21, 2008, 12:22:25 AM

zeldafan92 on (Chapter: index)
zeldafan92Okays ^^ Thank you for your comment, I'll fix that immediately.

mangacheese1818 on July 21, 2008, 6:38:34 AM

mangacheese1818 on (Chapter: index)
mangacheese1818Ah, much better.

ladychaos on July 20, 2008, 9:38:33 AM

ladychaos on (Chapter: 1)
ladychaosThis is beautifully written, i can feel the depth of the emotion which gets emphesised at the end with the song lyrics
i thing you should write more pieces like this

zeldafan92 on July 20, 2008, 12:26:27 PM

zeldafan92 on (Chapter: 1)
zeldafan92And I'm think of other songs to do... Originally I was contemplating if I should put 2 together but that'lll probably be too much. ^__^ thanks again btw.

zeldafan92 on July 20, 2008, 11:16:16 AM

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zeldafan92Wow O.o thank you so much. I'm just kinda sketch out a little bit were things should go, probably change the order and add a couple ideas and expand my description ^^ thank you again though for your comment. I'll let you know when it is complete ^____^

zeldafan92 on July 20, 2008, 12:25:01 PM

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zeldafan92Trying to not sound like I'm complaining and relate to the reader, will somebody let me know how I'm kinda doing so far? ^^ Thanks a bunch.