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Hospital Induced Sickness

Sars and Ecstacy, Do i REALLY have to expalin this one?

Chapters

Chapters

Chapter 1 - Awakenings
Submitted: August 2, 2004 • Updated: August 2, 2004
Word count: 2168 • Size: 12k • Comments: 13 • views: 598

Chapter 2 - Realizations
Submitted: August 3, 2004 • Updated: August 3, 2004
Word count: 2282 • Size: 12k • Comments: 8 • views: 391

Chapter 3 - Home
Submitted: August 8, 2004 • Updated: August 8, 2004
Word count: 1961 • Size: 10k • Comments: 8 • views: 418

Chapter 4 - Sickness
Submitted: August 10, 2004 • Updated: August 10, 2004
Word count: 1580 • Size: 9k • Comments: 8 • views: 374

Chapter 5 - Sex education
Submitted: August 26, 2004 • Updated: August 26, 2004
Word count: 1575 • Size: 9k • Comments: 34 • views: 720

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Nenshou_Nai_Kon on February 19, 2005, 4:17:39 AM

Nenshou_Nai_Kon on (Chapter: 5)
Nenshou_Nai_Kon-__- I want to slap VR I hate smartasses but sadly i am one of them. I don't act it though. If you met me you'd think i was a dumd idiot retard ,but if you saw my reportcard you'd be suprised at the results. By the way I worship you , but i kiss no @$$. others kiss mine, but not the other way around.Oh yeah and RITALIN ROCKS @$$!!!

Talin on February 16, 2005, 9:10:04 AM

Talin on (Chapter: 5)
TalinI read this whole story and it was really good! I loved it so much I added it to my favorites, I hope you still update, even thought you've left....If you do I will be very happy!

sars_is_my_friend on February 2, 2005, 6:39:43 AM

sars_is_my_friend on (Chapter: 5)
sars_is_my_friendc'mon.....Sars is the sexiest one of them all! He's mine! *grabs Sars and bares fangs* So back off!

sars_is_my_friend on February 2, 2005, 6:39:33 AM

sars_is_my_friend on (Chapter: 5)
sars_is_my_friendc'mon.....Sars is the sexiest one of them all! He's mine! *grabs Sars and bares fangs* So back off!

sars_is_my_friend on January 31, 2005, 7:02:38 AM

sars_is_my_friend on (Chapter: 5)
sars_is_my_friend*clinging to the computer monitor screen thing* must..........read........more..........ABOUT SARS!sorry, got a little carried away...duh you did. shut up! no! then leave me alone. I don't think i will*throws a chair*Okay, then.....
well, write some more!

KichigaiNeko-Chan on January 7, 2005, 5:48:55 PM

KichigaiNeko-Chan on (Chapter: 5)
KichigaiNeko-ChanMeh is learning!

Rei_Anul_Sama on November 26, 2004, 10:58:02 AM

Rei_Anul_Sama on (Chapter: 5)
Rei_Anul_SamaMORE!!!!!

GO RITALIN!!!!!

He's right about how humans should just die off...but about the rest, i'm not so sure...

demonsaintdante on November 14, 2004, 2:06:16 AM

demonsaintdante on (Chapter: 5)
demonsaintdanteWhy girls go after the one that is willing to kill them without a thought it beyond me. 0_o.

=and i think VR Jays idea would work better like this.=

The human anatomy does nothing for me…I find absolutely no excitement in grinding my sweaty body against someone else…” He turned to leave

The human form does nothing for me…I find absolutely no excitement in grinding my sweaty body against someone else…” He turned to leave

VR_Jay on November 6, 2004, 6:59:18 PM

VR_Jay on (Chapter: 5)
VR_JayIncorrect, mskchick, Ritalin is *not* yours. You see, Ritalin is a fictional character created by the twisted mind of our dear Sliver. He exists on paper alone. Therefore, it is both impossible and improbable for you to have any sort of relations with him, sexual or otherwise, as you so adamently seem to think.

On a different note, I find Ritalin to be a most facinanting character. More in depth than your others. That little speach he gave really meshed well with the personna you were trying to create. Couldn't have done it better myself. One thing to say is watch the repetition of certain words. Example:

”The human body does nothing for me…I find absolutely no excitement in grinding my sweaty body against someone else…” He turned to leave.

Instead of saying body twice, try useing another word like "form".

”The human body does nothing for me…I find absolutely no excitement in grinding my sweaty form against someone else…” He turned to leave.

Meh, just a suggetsion, and feel free to smack me if you see fit.

VR_Jay on November 6, 2004, 6:37:22 PM

VR_Jay on (Chapter: 3)
VR_JayPuting Sars in a fetal position was a nice touch. Gives you whole new outlook on sexual roles.