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Have You Ever Told a Lie?

Kiomi Natsuka didn't know of Kira until he killed her older brother. Now she's out for vengeance, with help from a Shinigami with mysterious motives. Can she separate truth from lies in time? Or will Kira add one more Natsuka to his list of victims?

Chapters

Chapters

Chapter 0 - Prologue
Submitted: October 2, 2008 • Updated: October 2, 2008
Word count: 379 • Size: 2k • Comments: 14 • views: 201

Chapter 1 - Pilot
Submitted: October 6, 2008 • Updated: November 2, 2008
Word count: 2295 • Size: 12k • Comments: 4 • views: 197

Chapter 2 - Interview
Submitted: November 2, 2008 • Updated: November 2, 2008
Word count: 1670 • Size: 8k • Comments: 4 • views: 201

Chapter 3 - Followed
Submitted: November 2, 2008 • Updated: December 1, 2008
Word count: 2290 • Size: 12k • Comments: 4 • views: 211

Chapter 4 - Text Talk
Submitted: December 1, 2008 • Updated: December 1, 2008
Word count: 1267 • Size: 6k • Comments: 1 • views: 162

Comments

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KelekiahGaladrian on December 1, 2008, 12:43:59 PM

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KelekiahGaladrianIt's just as wonderful and great as I remember, minus part of the end 'cause you didn't have that written last time I read it ^^ Slightly shorter though (actually, it's half the length of the last chapter if I'm correct XP).

Ooh, sounds like Kiomi can read lips. Awesome (I usually can't XP)! ^^

I luvs it Wulf-chan and I'm excited for more 'cause I haven't read past this part yet. ^^ GREAT JOB!!!!!!!!! ^^

KelekiahGaladrian on November 2, 2008, 12:14:50 PM

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KelekiahGaladrianIT'S KEZU!!!!!!!!!!!!! *glomps him randomly* ^^

Ravin: While Lego-chan is busy, I will review for her. She says that, as before, she loves the Shinigami scene and the fact that they're being followed. She also loves the personality and relationship between Light and Kiomi. This chapter also reminds her of the unfinished next chapter (at least it was unfinished when you sent it to her last) and she's excited for that. Overall, she loves it.

*still glomping Kezu and grinning*

YoriXYamiForever on November 2, 2008, 12:18:28 PM

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YoriXYamiForeverhehe, yay! ^^

I love Kezu too. And it's finished now, but just barely. And I still need to edit. I love Light and Kiomi's friendship ^^

KelekiahGaladrian on November 2, 2008, 12:23:14 PM

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KelekiahGaladrian^^ Awesomeness. That means I can REALLY critique when you post it. YES!!! ^^ *glomps Kezu again* Yes, they're friendship rocks!! ^^

KelekiahGaladrian on November 2, 2008, 12:06:55 PM

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KelekiahGaladrianAh, I remember this one. ^^ I love the way you end these chapters. It definitely makes you want to read even more. ^^ They're like mini cliffhangers lol Great job!! ^^

YoriXYamiForever on November 2, 2008, 12:07:48 PM

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YoriXYamiForeverHehe, arigatou! ^_^ I luvs the cliffhangers

KelekiahGaladrian on November 2, 2008, 12:11:04 PM

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KelekiahGaladrianYou're welcome!!! I love cliffhangers too, except when they're REALLY huge (and even then I love them) and when you have such a big cliffhanger that your reviewers/readers want to THROTTLE you.... ^^0

YoriXYamiForever on November 2, 2008, 12:11:54 PM

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YoriXYamiForeverhehe ^^0

KelekiahGaladrian on November 2, 2008, 12:16:15 PM

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KelekiahGaladrian^^0 It's especially bad when your readers/reviewers THREATEN you like a certain someone.... *glares at certain someone*

DeathNoteSurvivor on November 2, 2008, 7:33:55 AM

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DeathNoteSurvivorwow o0 long lol
and i love how the story's going, im excited to see how Kezu's personality influences the plot

YoriXYamiForever on November 2, 2008, 7:36:50 AM

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YoriXYamiForeverHe he, sorry, I like to make long chapters ^^;

Yay! I'm glad you like it. Kezu's personality is... interesting lol

DeathNoteSurvivor on November 2, 2008, 7:39:38 AM

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DeathNoteSurvivorlol well thats a difference of writing styles XP
and ill bet it is

YoriXYamiForever on November 2, 2008, 7:40:57 AM

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YoriXYamiForeverXD

DeathNoteSurvivor on November 2, 2008, 5:53:46 AM

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DeathNoteSurvivornice X3 Kiomi is certainly taking an interesting path
cant wait to see where it leads...tho i supposed ill have to xD

YoriXYamiForever on November 2, 2008, 5:58:56 AM

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YoriXYamiForeverShe's an interesting person, at least in my opinion lol. Glad you liked it ^^ I'll try not to make you wait long

KelekiahGaladrian on October 16, 2008, 2:40:46 AM

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KelekiahGaladrianAwesome job Wulf-chan! It's as great as I remember. (I'm sorry for the misunderstanding I created and I hope you can forgive me. XP)

YoriXYamiForever on November 2, 2008, 5:43:39 AM

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YoriXYamiForeverYay! ^^ I'm glad! (Np :P)

KelekiahGaladrian on November 2, 2008, 12:04:59 PM

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KelekiahGaladrianI'm glad you're glad. ^^

DeathNoteSurvivor on October 6, 2008, 10:27:32 AM

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DeathNoteSurvivorooh my, isnt she curious? wonder where thatll lead lol
great job Yori-chan^^

YoriXYamiForever on October 6, 2008, 10:29:51 AM

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YoriXYamiForeverProbably to problems.... just a hunch XD

Thanks!

DeathNoteSurvivor on October 6, 2008, 10:22:59 AM

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DeathNoteSurvivorvery nice XP cant wait to go read the next one (and i dont have to! xD)

YoriXYamiForever on October 6, 2008, 10:29:28 AM

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YoriXYamiForeverlol ^^

KelekiahGaladrian on October 2, 2008, 1:15:35 PM

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KelekiahGaladrianI don't think I'm going to critique this story here unless you want me to critique unread chapters that you post before you show me. It'll be easier for me to critique over IM instead, but I will comment on each chapter.

YOU'RE FINALLY POSTING IT!!!!! Though, you promised JT-kun you would, didn't you (yes, I look through comments and convos sometimes ^^0)?

I can't wait to see everyone else's reaction to this. You know I love it!!! ^^

Hmm... do you want me to beta it? Like, acting as a personal editor (if you don't know what a beta is....)?

GREAT JOB WITH IT THOUGH!!! AS I SAID, YOU KNOW I LOVE IT!!! ^^

YoriXYamiForever on October 2, 2008, 1:20:51 PM

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YoriXYamiForeverYay! ^^ That's fine with me!

YEP I AM POSTING IT!! lol Now that I'm sure where I want to go with it and that I'm actually going to write it. Yes I did promise him ^^

hehehe, Yep! I love it too, but that's kind of biased isn't it? lol

I don't understand that exactly but... ok!

THANKS!!

KelekiahGaladrian on October 2, 2008, 1:24:41 PM

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KelekiahGaladrianYay! That'll make it so much easier for me XP lol

That's kool. I'll get MSXDN moving eventually, after I get through L's part, though I'm not entirely sure I'll actually post it. We shall see. Hehe, I shouldn't read people's convos anymore. It's not very nice XP

lol if you say so ^^

Well, it's basically what you've been doing with each chapter of HYETL so far, having someone else edit it before you post it. That's what a beta does. After all, you can't find EVERY mistake you read even if you read it a million times. Besides, there may be plot holes and stuff others can pick out and all that. But whatever, it doesn't really matter to me. It's your choice.

You're welcome!!!!! ^^

YoriXYamiForever on October 5, 2008, 9:57:54 AM

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YoriXYamiForeverKool ^^ No it's not very nice :P

I'd love for you to be my beta!!! lol

KelekiahGaladrian on October 5, 2008, 11:16:15 PM

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KelekiahGaladrianHehehe ^^0

YAY!!!! ^^ *shouts to the world* I'M WULF-CHAN'S BETA!!!!!!!! ^^