Trinity_Fire

ME 2000? You think THAT'S old? Honey, my non-laptop computer is a 98. And that was an UPGRADE for me.

But anyways, as to the spelling...

You spelled "leapt" wrong in the first chapter and "illumination" wrong in the second..."fiery" in the third and "intrigued" in the fourth...nothing in the fifth, but "definitely" in the sixth. And I think "stainglass" is supposed to be "stained glass."

Sorry...

But as to Word highlighting all the words you make up, did you know that if you right-click on them and select "Add to Dictionary," you can make it stop highlighting them? Like, for instance, if you Add Valkyre to the dictionary, then it won't highlight the word Valkyre, but would highlight mistakes like Vlkyre (and I think you did misspell Valkyre in one of your chapters).

I'm sorry if I'm being horrifically spelling-Nazi here. Iris really is outstanding, spelling errors be damned. Tell me to stop and I will...

Oh, no, I'm not trying to set you up as a genius or anything! (Wow, that sounded horrible TT.TT ) I know that half the time when I do things like I pointed out in your story, I do them completely by accident and only notice them when I look back. You just do it because it feels right, right? But far too many people don't do it at all, because they can't seem to "feel" if it works or connects or anything. Which means you have the Author Sense Of What Is Good In A Story, Which Far Too Many Authors Do Not Have (ASOWIGIASWFTMADNH [???]) Which, on top of being an already above-average author (alliteration by accident,) makes your stories a real pleasure to read ^.^

Which was why I stayed up so late reading it ~.^

As to the tattoos, for the satyr I think you could do a rocky mountain goat without difficulty. Their shape is different and somehow much more grand than a normal goat, you know? With the ruff around their neck and such. I can imagine a rocky mountain goat on Iris. Not a normal one, but a rocky mountain one could work. Possibly.

Elf, though, I have no idea for. Elves aren't really crossed with anything...they're just kind of there. So unless you did something that was purely symbolic of an elf, like a butterfly or a fox or a leaf...oh, wait, leaf was probably dryad, huh? Unless that was a tree...

Okay, overanalyzing again. Sorry ^.^;

As to endings...no, perfect happy endings aren't quite my thing either. Perfection always seems forced. But "happy ending" does not necessarily encompass perfection--just some modicum of happiness. Usually for the two mains. Who in this case definitely deserve some little speck of it...gods know, they haven't have much in their lives up until now...

To address another point, yes, I'm sure Iris would never have torn Valkyre to shreds, even if Valkyre had tried to kill him. However, the fact remains that HAD Iris had the inclination and the motivation, he COULD have ripped Valkyre to shreds. Which somehow puts the earlier part of the story in quite a different light... :major sweatdrop:

All right! Anyways, glad I could be of service, so to speak. Again, if you ever want editing, you know where the thread is ~.^ So for now, I suppose my next destination is DD_DM and Senay_Dragon!

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AFTER I fav Iris... --.-- Goddess above, I write all those comments and strangle my curiosity to get it to wait and I forget to fav the bloody story responsible? Yeesh...

Yea, sometimes I draw it in pencil, then use pen, then erase the pencil. And it would still look somewhat messy. Yours looks so neat it drives me to practice which leads to me wasting loads of paper. o___o;
Meh name is realeh Angel, for seriously. But some of my friends call me demon or devil...Im not that bad am I? xD

Iris? Okay, I can do that. And don't worry--I read Watership Down when I was nine. Chapters have NEVER scared me ~.^

Besides, I like Nocte. Yes, it needs work, but what you have is still good.

And by the way, if you ever want editing assistance (to catch those annoying little grammar and spelling issues that always crop up, no matter how hard you try to get rid of them,) please, ask me on the Grammatical Assistance Offered thread in Fanfiction Critiques on the forums. I'll help as much as I can ~.^